i was hooked by the Time Traveller's Wife on the first and second page. It starts with about three staccato sentences, in Clare's pov, and then longer ones. By the time we get to Henry's pov, about 200 words later, we're into a great big doozy of a sentence.
Again, this is all horses for courses. If you like sharp sentences, a staccato opening will work. If you don't, it won't. Until someone creates an identikit reader profile, there is no magic formula. Write the opening that works for you. Write it in your voice, and your style. Get some feedback and hone it - but don't change that darn voice. Forcing yourself into writing contortions that aren't you simply won't work. Ever.
Again, this is all horses for courses. If you like sharp sentences, a staccato opening will work. If you don't, it won't. Until someone creates an identikit reader profile, there is no magic formula. Write the opening that works for you. Write it in your voice, and your style. Get some feedback and hone it - but don't change that darn voice. Forcing yourself into writing contortions that aren't you simply won't work. Ever.