Timben
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This chapter needs something. I can't figure out what. It's boring. Anyway to spice it up a little? And yes the tenses are all over the place. This is just a rough draft.
Chapter XXV
While Chen looked around, two Coil agents stood on the balcony, aiming their bolt-action rifles at Chen. They were going to use Chen as target practice, when Peter rushed in, examined the situation, raised his rifle, and fired. Toppling them down to the floor of the courtyard dead. Chen wheeled around only to see Peter clutching a rifle.
“Peter, thought Sam told you to…” said Chen.
“Not my commanding officer,” said Peter smiling.
“There doesn’t seem to be any luck here, I wonder how Sam is doing below,” said Chen.
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Sam toting his British rifle in hand, continued onward. There were no signs of them anywhere. He visited the guest quarters, where his room was still ransacked. There on the wall, were the paintings, he looked at each one but they didn’t seem to be alive. Like the assassin who tried to kill him earlier. Next, he visited Peter’s room. Same thing, paintings but no assassins. He crawled back inside the chamber and there he was back in the underground tunnel. Sam swallowed hard and hoped and prayed that he wouldn’t set off any booby traps while stumbling around. It wasn’t long before he came across the exit, watching above ever so carefully. He hurried but cautiously. He knew they had to be somewhere.