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Hello Chroners!
I wish to update my Amazon summary for my novel The 13th Vote. Wondered if you might help me choose and polish a summary? I've three options below. Please let me know which one you like best, and why. Also, would be extremely grateful if you could suggest improvements to your choice. thank you! Bren G
Option #1
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Fifty-Six years after leaving earth, humanity is at a crossroads. When a glum detective and an idealistic journalist team up to solve a murder, they discover a young man at its center, whose family holds the secret that can expose a brutal truth about the colony’s founding and stop a brutal civil war.
Option #2
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Fifty-Six years after escaping earth, humanity is at a crossroads, and its fate is in the hands of a typical college student.
Alyn Frederick Jr. has fallen on hard times, he has just one friend, and worst of all, he cannot find the courage to ask his crush out on a date. When his deadbeat dad is murdered, Alyn is dragged into a grand conspiracy of the highest order. At its heart is a dark family secret that a powerful politician would plunge the colony into civil war to protect.
Alyn takes an interplanetary journey, aided by an idealistic journalist, a desolate gumshoe, and a rapidly developing AI, in search of answers. However, the truth won’t come from the shadows easy. Alyn must find the courage to find it if he is to save humanity and the world.
Option #3
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By 2034, a global war has killed billions, and the earth’s last remnants have settled off-world. Over fifty years later, humanity is plagued by strife yet again, as the colony’s government fights an evil insurgent faction. But not all is what it seems when Alyn Frederick Jr. is shocked by the murder of his father, and is joined by a desolate detective and an idealistic journalist to solve the case. They discover a grand conspiracy that threatens the planet and puts Alyn on an interplanetary journey to learn a dark family secret. If he can expose the truth, he might stop a brutal civil war.
I wish to update my Amazon summary for my novel The 13th Vote. Wondered if you might help me choose and polish a summary? I've three options below. Please let me know which one you like best, and why. Also, would be extremely grateful if you could suggest improvements to your choice. thank you! Bren G
Option #1
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Fifty-Six years after leaving earth, humanity is at a crossroads. When a glum detective and an idealistic journalist team up to solve a murder, they discover a young man at its center, whose family holds the secret that can expose a brutal truth about the colony’s founding and stop a brutal civil war.
Option #2
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Fifty-Six years after escaping earth, humanity is at a crossroads, and its fate is in the hands of a typical college student.
Alyn Frederick Jr. has fallen on hard times, he has just one friend, and worst of all, he cannot find the courage to ask his crush out on a date. When his deadbeat dad is murdered, Alyn is dragged into a grand conspiracy of the highest order. At its heart is a dark family secret that a powerful politician would plunge the colony into civil war to protect.
Alyn takes an interplanetary journey, aided by an idealistic journalist, a desolate gumshoe, and a rapidly developing AI, in search of answers. However, the truth won’t come from the shadows easy. Alyn must find the courage to find it if he is to save humanity and the world.
Option #3
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By 2034, a global war has killed billions, and the earth’s last remnants have settled off-world. Over fifty years later, humanity is plagued by strife yet again, as the colony’s government fights an evil insurgent faction. But not all is what it seems when Alyn Frederick Jr. is shocked by the murder of his father, and is joined by a desolate detective and an idealistic journalist to solve the case. They discover a grand conspiracy that threatens the planet and puts Alyn on an interplanetary journey to learn a dark family secret. If he can expose the truth, he might stop a brutal civil war.