Second half of an opening scene

CTRandall

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Overall, I like this. I'd like to see the first part, as I'm interested in seeing how strong Dr York's depression is and how you deal with it. Here, it feels hinted at but brushed over--that might be because it's an excerpt, though. If she is really dealing with depression, I think that needs a touch more.

Jo and thaddeus6th got pretty much all of the grammar/mistakes/and good advice, so I wont' go there.
 

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