- Oct 25, 2017
- Buried beneath too many words
So, I occasionally feel that I'm losing a close grip on my POV character in certain scenes. In those scenes, he/she is an observer of, or minor participant in, the 'action'.
Case in point, I'm editing a scene which involves something of a free-for-all discussion with a large cast of characters and she has little to say. It's not that she's the wrong POV to use in this scene...nobody really stands out and we do need an invested observer...but that she's not deep into it. I've tried a few 'she felt her palms begin to sweat', 'she watched his eyes widen', 'she examined her boots'...but it all sounds a little forced and it gets very old very quickly.
This sense of slight disconnect might last for a page before she does have something to say, or feels a genuine reaction, but is this a problem?
I'm wondering whether it's simply the time that I'm spending editing that's making it seem worse. I'm taking fifteen minutes to get through that page, whereas a reader would be through it in one and might not even notice?
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