Paul Meccano
Meccano Magic
Hi all
A little nervous as this is my first novel and I'm 72000 words in ( edited to a degree ). I have been through a real journey with this one, I'm sure that's not unusual but please be kind-ish
No actually don't. I'm ready, hit me.
This book skirts the edge of sic fi as a genre,in part, and knee deeps itself in another, traversing England 1975 and the future 2407. There is a real twist to the plot at the 3/4 point with my misdirection hopefully turning the whole on it's head but engrossing the reader more, having given more to the characters they have invested in ( not taking away). as such what your seeing here is little, but as the starting chapter should, if considered, give plenty. I do hope that's the case.
I haven't pushed my style ( quite standard I'm sure) outside of my own comfortable mind before so am interested in your thoughts.
Chapter 1
The moon could be seen from this position, it looked huge but was still insignificant considering the expanse of the space and time around it. Considering all that was known now, it was as a speck of sand on a beach formed in the memory of Tricky, as insignificant and tiny as the new found elementary particles that made up that one thought in the sea of time and space, in the sea of all dimensions, everything. The beach in that memory, the memory of Lisa was at a time when the dreamstealer first appeared, the very first time.
The recording had started.
‘The energy levels are much lower in here now. It makes this bit slightly easier. My physical recovery is, well, just about there. It means I can sit, walk, talk, drink, piss and sh*t all by myself.’ He heard the click of the editing processor in his earpiece making him aware that some words from his sarcastic and somewhat uncalled for comment had been removed. It wasn’t the words but the expression of them, they were looking for someone else and the edit would be marked against him.
The vitamin enriching light was still bright but less so now, the bio-mesh had done its job and he looked and felt much better. Waking up was still an issue and it took some time to right himself, some time to understand that he was not alone, to understand that this complex and irreversible existence was now his life. It had taken many recordings and time in recovery to get this far.
‘I feel a little uneasy still but it’s…...’ he looked to the monitor ‘twenty-five minuets and thirty-two seconds in and so far I’ve come to terms with my………’ he looked up to the lights above him and blinked a couple of times, it was hard finding the words to best explain his understanding of this, but more important was his ability to contextualize it, in a way that others would understand. ‘Conflict’, That word seemed strange, he had used it on his last attempt knowing it would suit some of the higher powers, the ones that wanted an outcome that they could understand. They weren’t the type to accept ignorance as a pre-cursor to knowledge and as such were ignorant.
‘So I’ve been briefed on what to cover and I’m aware that you’re looking for detail that confirms my understanding of events leading to now, coupled with information on the other, errr, other events……... my recent journey that can help. So I’ll begin if that’s okay.’
There was a pause in the recording, a moment where silence held the hint of everything to come.
‘2407, the year of the solar event and the year that, well, brings us here, today.’ He breathed deep holding back some conflicting feelings and some unsavory words that almost found their own way to his lips. ‘The device that fired at the sun, our sun, turned up out of nowhere and was recovered too late after the event to make any difference, the damage had been done.
The events following that, the events on the surface of earth were devastating and would be for any populated planet. The weapons used were bio-engineered almost perfectly with few survivors, it was only the lack of spread, the flaw in the initial attack, coupled with a rare and unexpected immunity in a small percentage that left a pocket open for the survivors of humanity.’ He paused, the emotions were starting to mount inside, ‘the conflict, the bloody conflict’ he thought ‘they’re my bloody thoughts, its not a bloody conflict’. He started to go a little dizzy but continued anyway.
‘We have a way to solve this now you know, we have an understanding of the weapon, we know how to use it for better, we, we’ He was loosing it, it wouldn’t be long now, they would end this review.
‘I remember the start, the moment where the stone hit the pond, the first bounce of the skim.’ He was clenching his hands, he looked up again into the lights. ‘I remember the end where it bounced many times, many times before…’ a tear started to roll down his cheek, a double click in his ear signified that the review was about to be cancelled and wouldn’t be recorded further than the standard twenty seconds, the frustration of it was too much, he cracked and blurted.
‘I’m Tricky and I was sat on the hill, Fellsteep hill’ he closed his eye’s, ‘I remember the colours you know, it had been under all of them, all of the sky’s, blue, black, Yellow, hazy orange grey, Linin white, Cotton candy pink, Cerulean blue, dark and thunderous, dark and deathly, it had been there all the time, the dreamstealer…………….’
Fellsteep Hill
12.44am 4min after the big meeting
Blue, black, Yellow, hazy orange grey, Linin white, Cotton candy pink, Cerulean blue, dark and thunderous, dark and deathly.
Below all the sky's Tricky had ever seen had sat the dream stealer, treading streets Tricky had trodden, holding dreams he'd clear forgotten that once were his.
Tricky had known the entity all of his life or so it seemed, but not until he met it, whilst sat on Fellsteep hill this night, while the sky was clear and the tears from Tricky's eye's had all but dried from his cheeks did he see him fully embodied for the first time.
A cruel looking figure, something in its stance, teasing, gloating, praying on his misery, the misery it had dispensed in a languid slow slice removing from his life every great dream Tricky had ever dreamed, the dreams that would make the difference.
Shouldering a cloak made of the dark of nothing, the void of space, its cold bitter nothingness woven in its fabric and covering its whole, its face shrouded by a heavy black hood giving no hint beyond, a faceless un-feeling entity. It had meant to do this. The realisation was as clear as his need to react.
It had meant to take everything.
Gripped with anger Tricky rose, his foot slipping on the damp dewy grass, the soil chilling his finger tips as his nails dug down deep, pulling, dragging, forcing himself forward, the damp air rushing to dry his eyes in their wallowing salted digress.
Enraged he flung himself at the dream stealer, had never run so fast, never been so nimble, but the more enraged he became the faster the dream stealer ran.
Across the brow of the hill, into the leaf stripped trees and heavy gauze thicket he ran, tears starting to flow again blurring his vision. His heavy feet beginning to stumble, his broken heart now breaking again as he tried desperately to push aside the branches, one after another, scratching at his arms and neck, ripping at his skin, forcing him to close his eyes, tripping, stumbling, falling.
He wiped his tears and rose again expecting the chase to be done, expecting to have lost his retribution, his revenge. The dreamstealer was just ahead and strangely just stood, taunting, seeming to beg his attention, craving his further engagement. There was a moments pause, before Tricky bellowed the scream of a hollow man and lunged again toward the dark foreboding figure, a loud crack was heard ricocheting through the thicket and against all that he expected, the dreamstealer lunged back and where they met all went black.
A little nervous as this is my first novel and I'm 72000 words in ( edited to a degree ). I have been through a real journey with this one, I'm sure that's not unusual but please be kind-ish
No actually don't. I'm ready, hit me.
This book skirts the edge of sic fi as a genre,in part, and knee deeps itself in another, traversing England 1975 and the future 2407. There is a real twist to the plot at the 3/4 point with my misdirection hopefully turning the whole on it's head but engrossing the reader more, having given more to the characters they have invested in ( not taking away). as such what your seeing here is little, but as the starting chapter should, if considered, give plenty. I do hope that's the case.
I haven't pushed my style ( quite standard I'm sure) outside of my own comfortable mind before so am interested in your thoughts.
Chapter 1
The moon could be seen from this position, it looked huge but was still insignificant considering the expanse of the space and time around it. Considering all that was known now, it was as a speck of sand on a beach formed in the memory of Tricky, as insignificant and tiny as the new found elementary particles that made up that one thought in the sea of time and space, in the sea of all dimensions, everything. The beach in that memory, the memory of Lisa was at a time when the dreamstealer first appeared, the very first time.
The recording had started.
‘The energy levels are much lower in here now. It makes this bit slightly easier. My physical recovery is, well, just about there. It means I can sit, walk, talk, drink, piss and sh*t all by myself.’ He heard the click of the editing processor in his earpiece making him aware that some words from his sarcastic and somewhat uncalled for comment had been removed. It wasn’t the words but the expression of them, they were looking for someone else and the edit would be marked against him.
The vitamin enriching light was still bright but less so now, the bio-mesh had done its job and he looked and felt much better. Waking up was still an issue and it took some time to right himself, some time to understand that he was not alone, to understand that this complex and irreversible existence was now his life. It had taken many recordings and time in recovery to get this far.
‘I feel a little uneasy still but it’s…...’ he looked to the monitor ‘twenty-five minuets and thirty-two seconds in and so far I’ve come to terms with my………’ he looked up to the lights above him and blinked a couple of times, it was hard finding the words to best explain his understanding of this, but more important was his ability to contextualize it, in a way that others would understand. ‘Conflict’, That word seemed strange, he had used it on his last attempt knowing it would suit some of the higher powers, the ones that wanted an outcome that they could understand. They weren’t the type to accept ignorance as a pre-cursor to knowledge and as such were ignorant.
‘So I’ve been briefed on what to cover and I’m aware that you’re looking for detail that confirms my understanding of events leading to now, coupled with information on the other, errr, other events……... my recent journey that can help. So I’ll begin if that’s okay.’
There was a pause in the recording, a moment where silence held the hint of everything to come.
‘2407, the year of the solar event and the year that, well, brings us here, today.’ He breathed deep holding back some conflicting feelings and some unsavory words that almost found their own way to his lips. ‘The device that fired at the sun, our sun, turned up out of nowhere and was recovered too late after the event to make any difference, the damage had been done.
The events following that, the events on the surface of earth were devastating and would be for any populated planet. The weapons used were bio-engineered almost perfectly with few survivors, it was only the lack of spread, the flaw in the initial attack, coupled with a rare and unexpected immunity in a small percentage that left a pocket open for the survivors of humanity.’ He paused, the emotions were starting to mount inside, ‘the conflict, the bloody conflict’ he thought ‘they’re my bloody thoughts, its not a bloody conflict’. He started to go a little dizzy but continued anyway.
‘We have a way to solve this now you know, we have an understanding of the weapon, we know how to use it for better, we, we’ He was loosing it, it wouldn’t be long now, they would end this review.
‘I remember the start, the moment where the stone hit the pond, the first bounce of the skim.’ He was clenching his hands, he looked up again into the lights. ‘I remember the end where it bounced many times, many times before…’ a tear started to roll down his cheek, a double click in his ear signified that the review was about to be cancelled and wouldn’t be recorded further than the standard twenty seconds, the frustration of it was too much, he cracked and blurted.
‘I’m Tricky and I was sat on the hill, Fellsteep hill’ he closed his eye’s, ‘I remember the colours you know, it had been under all of them, all of the sky’s, blue, black, Yellow, hazy orange grey, Linin white, Cotton candy pink, Cerulean blue, dark and thunderous, dark and deathly, it had been there all the time, the dreamstealer…………….’
Fellsteep Hill
12.44am 4min after the big meeting
Blue, black, Yellow, hazy orange grey, Linin white, Cotton candy pink, Cerulean blue, dark and thunderous, dark and deathly.
Below all the sky's Tricky had ever seen had sat the dream stealer, treading streets Tricky had trodden, holding dreams he'd clear forgotten that once were his.
Tricky had known the entity all of his life or so it seemed, but not until he met it, whilst sat on Fellsteep hill this night, while the sky was clear and the tears from Tricky's eye's had all but dried from his cheeks did he see him fully embodied for the first time.
A cruel looking figure, something in its stance, teasing, gloating, praying on his misery, the misery it had dispensed in a languid slow slice removing from his life every great dream Tricky had ever dreamed, the dreams that would make the difference.
Shouldering a cloak made of the dark of nothing, the void of space, its cold bitter nothingness woven in its fabric and covering its whole, its face shrouded by a heavy black hood giving no hint beyond, a faceless un-feeling entity. It had meant to do this. The realisation was as clear as his need to react.
It had meant to take everything.
Gripped with anger Tricky rose, his foot slipping on the damp dewy grass, the soil chilling his finger tips as his nails dug down deep, pulling, dragging, forcing himself forward, the damp air rushing to dry his eyes in their wallowing salted digress.
Enraged he flung himself at the dream stealer, had never run so fast, never been so nimble, but the more enraged he became the faster the dream stealer ran.
Across the brow of the hill, into the leaf stripped trees and heavy gauze thicket he ran, tears starting to flow again blurring his vision. His heavy feet beginning to stumble, his broken heart now breaking again as he tried desperately to push aside the branches, one after another, scratching at his arms and neck, ripping at his skin, forcing him to close his eyes, tripping, stumbling, falling.
He wiped his tears and rose again expecting the chase to be done, expecting to have lost his retribution, his revenge. The dreamstealer was just ahead and strangely just stood, taunting, seeming to beg his attention, craving his further engagement. There was a moments pause, before Tricky bellowed the scream of a hollow man and lunged again toward the dark foreboding figure, a loud crack was heard ricocheting through the thicket and against all that he expected, the dreamstealer lunged back and where they met all went black.