AnyaKimlin
Confuddled
I'm going to apologise for what is going to be a bunch of very silly questions. Long story short my life went a tad tits up last year and it sucked my confidence a lot and I need to get back on track with everything including my books.
It's the first chapter of a book you know is fantasy. One you know is the second in a series you haven't read before. How much explanation of these three incidents/statements would you need or would you accept it's a fantasy and you will find out? Some feedback suggests I need to explain why Socrates isn't mortal and how he blew the door off. I know if I would reading a fantasy I would be happy that these things happened and I would find out the reason. I'd also assume that the Skua had some significance.
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My brother is the one person who may help me work out what to do. He's sort of the mortal, except he's not mortal, version of a wardrobe, but he's less wooden and doesn't smell of mothballs. I open the door a little to shout. “Go away.”
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There's an explosion. What on Litae? It makes my heart race and the adrenaline makes the Rush kick in. sh*t. Crap. What the... I open the door a crack to see fiery splinters pouring down from the sky. The sprinklers kick in and rain all over the room, destroying centuries of history. Silhouetted in the doorway is Socrates. He fiddles with his collar and looks round. “Sprinklers off. Light on.” {by this point you know the room is in a palace and character is in a wardrobe]
The room is bathed in light and he steps over the threshold. I close the door.
“Too much power. I was only supposed to blow the bloody door open.” He sighs. It's loud enough to hear through the wardrobe. Soc has a whole repertoire of sighs some of which measure highly in the Richter scale. “Bloody hell my hair's a right mess.”
*****
I'm staring out to sea. Is that... a sea bird – Skua maybe? Could it? No. After I've finished with Daisy I'll get my Soaring Warriors to investigate. The last time Islanders saw a Great Skua in the skies they organised witch hunts and there was some serious public unrest.
It's the first chapter of a book you know is fantasy. One you know is the second in a series you haven't read before. How much explanation of these three incidents/statements would you need or would you accept it's a fantasy and you will find out? Some feedback suggests I need to explain why Socrates isn't mortal and how he blew the door off. I know if I would reading a fantasy I would be happy that these things happened and I would find out the reason. I'd also assume that the Skua had some significance.
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My brother is the one person who may help me work out what to do. He's sort of the mortal, except he's not mortal, version of a wardrobe, but he's less wooden and doesn't smell of mothballs. I open the door a little to shout. “Go away.”
*****
There's an explosion. What on Litae? It makes my heart race and the adrenaline makes the Rush kick in. sh*t. Crap. What the... I open the door a crack to see fiery splinters pouring down from the sky. The sprinklers kick in and rain all over the room, destroying centuries of history. Silhouetted in the doorway is Socrates. He fiddles with his collar and looks round. “Sprinklers off. Light on.” {by this point you know the room is in a palace and character is in a wardrobe]
The room is bathed in light and he steps over the threshold. I close the door.
“Too much power. I was only supposed to blow the bloody door open.” He sighs. It's loud enough to hear through the wardrobe. Soc has a whole repertoire of sighs some of which measure highly in the Richter scale. “Bloody hell my hair's a right mess.”
*****
I'm staring out to sea. Is that... a sea bird – Skua maybe? Could it? No. After I've finished with Daisy I'll get my Soaring Warriors to investigate. The last time Islanders saw a Great Skua in the skies they organised witch hunts and there was some serious public unrest.
