Tecdavid
Verdentia's Gardener
I mentioned a little while ago that my WiP's opening is a dream sequence, and that started a little discussion as to why that could be a problem. I've since written an alternative first chapter that avoids the whole thing, but I do think the original is best for conveying necessary details. However, when the original was recently critiqued, the narrative's 'Distant 3rd-person' point of view was mentioned as being bothersome. I could bring the narrative closer, but does anyone think that would the make the "dreamer”’s awakening, by the end of the chapter, much more jarring? How about peppering the chapter with fragmentary hints that the scene is, in fact, a dream, so to make the awakening less sudden?
Does anyone think those ideas could work in a dream sequence? Especially one that opens the story?
Does anyone think those ideas could work in a dream sequence? Especially one that opens the story?