The Bloated One
Well-Known Member
Hi everyone,
Problem - How to show a character's thoughts during his speech. The convention I use is to put them in italics. See the red text below. But, is this correct?
“Professor Patrick. . .Professor Patrick Pending!” exclaimed Tarquin, “he’ll be able to read it!”
“Pat Pend. . ?“
“You know, your great friend and historian.” Tarquin looked pleadingly at Jeremiah. “Thin, flash of white hair, rides a-” He stopped in mid sentence. Bicycles didn’t exist in 15th century England!
He coughed loudly and continued, “Rides a horse.“ Jeremiah stood and gawped.
“Great, that’s done then!” said Tarquin loudly, stretching out his hand for the journal.
Or, should I consider rewriting the piece?
TBO
Problem - How to show a character's thoughts during his speech. The convention I use is to put them in italics. See the red text below. But, is this correct?
“Professor Patrick. . .Professor Patrick Pending!” exclaimed Tarquin, “he’ll be able to read it!”
“Pat Pend. . ?“
“You know, your great friend and historian.” Tarquin looked pleadingly at Jeremiah. “Thin, flash of white hair, rides a-” He stopped in mid sentence. Bicycles didn’t exist in 15th century England!
He coughed loudly and continued, “Rides a horse.“ Jeremiah stood and gawped.
“Great, that’s done then!” said Tarquin loudly, stretching out his hand for the journal.
Or, should I consider rewriting the piece?
TBO