Some of us were never into the drug scene, or really knew anyone who was, and that allusion went 100,000 miles over my head.thanks all, so by my reckoning it's 5-2 for missing the meaning on the first reading - @paranoid marvin and @Marvin i'm putting you down as missing the point, @Hugh as getting it.
it was meant to be about chasing the dragon (i.e. drug abuse). seems it wasn't clear enough. and reading it without the underlying meaning i can see how it doesn't really make sense.
No problem. I make similar assumptions about Biblical knowledge and have similar results more than I care to admit.
"Chasing the dragon" was a phrase I had never heard before. Perhaps it never took root in the US. Cultural references that I have thought were well known have tripped me up in the past.
Just done a quick net search...cheers all. the phrase chasing the dragon refers to inhaling heated drug vapour. i think it originated from opium use but now refers to any drug you can ingest this way. so there you go, some extra knowledge for you all.
by the way i'd like to point out my knowledge is not first hand!
Interesting, I thought it it originated from the 19th century opium dens rather than the post war era.'Chasing the dragon' was a later refinement of this form of heroin smoking, originating in or near Hong Kong in the 1950s,
I'm a bad one for this issue and I'm going point out something that sounds daft but makes sense. Well, to me anyway.I'd love a critique on mine if there are any takers. Nary even a mention it garnered. I didn't think it was that bad but I guess we all love our babies don't we . I thought perhaps that it was risky given it was unlikely anyone would know that CJ-20 jetfighter is named 'The Dragon'. I didn't before I wrote it. I suspect that was part of it but please fire away (pun intended)!
A NEW WORLD ORDER
Hawking was right about aliens. Aggressive like us, but better weapons. Like Cortez’s Spaniards, the small lizard horde massed below, their armor glinting in the waning sunlight, preparing for the final charge. We, the last North Americans, steeled ourselves, and prepared to die.
A thunderclap broke through the heavens, followed by shouts from our ranks:
“Oh, the mighty dragons!”
Eyes raised, we watched triumphally as rockets rained hell upon our foe.
Ah.. interesting @Luiglin and that makes total sense. I really like your ending too! If only I had thought of it!I'm a bad one for this issue and I'm going point out something that sounds daft but makes sense. Well, to me anyway.
The tale itself is fine. What let it down for me is that you mention the last North Americans. This gave me an instant image of a rag tag army of soldiers, police, civilians etc. The issue though is would these have recognised that specific fighter? Army, yes but the rest, I'd suggest not. For me, with real world stuff, even though it is fantasy/dystopian/sci-fi, it has to have a basis in reality.
Now, if you'd showed the Chinese fighters coming over the horizon like mythical dragons then that would have had a thumbs up from me.
I hope that makes sense.
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