When all is said and done, all's quiet and boring.
- Apr 6, 2017
I think you, and others who said as much, are correct. When I wrote it thus, I couldn't escape the thought, "Why would a star use our terms?", but didn't consider that the star was using English to tell a story, so it really isn't that much of a stretch to convert...@Joshua Jones .... I must confess to being slow on the uptake. My wife of 47 years has come to understand that hints are almost as transparent to me as lead. And I'm afraid that's what happened with this story.
I realized almost immediately that you were anthropomorphizing the sun. And I got that the people escaping were running from the immanent nova. For me it all came down to the numbers. I thought that they were some obscure shorthand that the sun was using to communicate. I never gave the periodic table or atomic weight a first thought, let alone a second. I think your story would have been much more effective if you had done away with the numbers and perhaps mentioned "my elemental iron heart" or some such as that.
And I think the part about subtle hints is a common malady... my wife has taken to opening Amazon windows on my phone's internet browser with items she wants...