Miss Taylor
slightly afraid of knarls
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Still it snowed, thick, swirling, Domatra a mass of white flakes and pale grey sky. The vast tower, usually just visible to the west appeared to have vanished in the unending blizzard, but the large silver orb hanging over the high arched doorway told her that it was still very much in existance.
Phoebe sat upon the windowsill, legs bent up to her chest, staring out. The seat by the small apple tree where only a week ago she and Rona had sat in happy, excited anticipation of the upcoming Ball was, like it's once leafy companion, swiftly becoming suffocated in snow.
Phoebe emphathised with it, feeling in some perhaps childish, sentimental way that the bench was missing it's favourite inhabitant, Rona's warmth and laughter in the midst of the stormy, thick choas just as much as she was.
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This is an extract from the middle to end of my novel that I wrote previously; what I'm really wondering is does it convey grief, loneliness and isolation well, or is it over or under done? The entire novel isn't anywhere near done yet, but this scene iis farily important to me.
Still it snowed, thick, swirling, Domatra a mass of white flakes and pale grey sky. The vast tower, usually just visible to the west appeared to have vanished in the unending blizzard, but the large silver orb hanging over the high arched doorway told her that it was still very much in existance.
Phoebe sat upon the windowsill, legs bent up to her chest, staring out. The seat by the small apple tree where only a week ago she and Rona had sat in happy, excited anticipation of the upcoming Ball was, like it's once leafy companion, swiftly becoming suffocated in snow.
Phoebe emphathised with it, feeling in some perhaps childish, sentimental way that the bench was missing it's favourite inhabitant, Rona's warmth and laughter in the midst of the stormy, thick choas just as much as she was.
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This is an extract from the middle to end of my novel that I wrote previously; what I'm really wondering is does it convey grief, loneliness and isolation well, or is it over or under done? The entire novel isn't anywhere near done yet, but this scene iis farily important to me.
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