Lacedaemonian - Polished Chapter

[Lacedaemonian]

I guess if I was to write a story, I would be pleased if it brought some happiness to a few people. This would be success to me. I hasten to add that those few people would have to be cool.

 

[Sparker]

Hiya Lace,

As I'm not feeling too technically minded and right now I'm sitting at work on here rather than err... working... I'm just going to say that I don't dislike either version. Having left it a couple of days between reading each one I will say that your second attempt has addressed everything that was deemed 'wrong' with the first one. So please do not think your efforts unsuccessful.

Having said that, if I had a choice, the mysterious factor is always going to win with me so I'm putting my backing towards your first version. The enjoyment of reading that one led me to having a look at this so happiness was definitely brought.

Hope you can figure out a happy medium, hmmm, shall I do some work now?
Take care,
Sparker

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Cheers Sparker! One question; Are you cool?

 

[Sparker]

I'll let you be the judge of that Lace, a person who has to tell people that he is cool... is almost certainly... not cool!

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Depends entirely how he delivers the line.

Women are not cool though.

 

[jackokent]

I think you're wrong there Lace, there are definately some cool ones on this site

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Ah Jack dont be fooled by them. They're all trash.

 

[jackokent]

Well maybe I'm just showing my uncoolness here then but anyone to me who is published (properly as in fiction) is cool.

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Nah mate you are wrong. Though I concede when Mein Kampf was published in 1925 and Zweites Buch in 1961, Hitler took on a whole new level of cool.

 

[Sparker]

Wow, this has all the makings of a serious history debate! If I hadn't suppressed everything I learnt while at uni (or was it lost to alcohol poisoning?) I'd attempt to provide a counter statement... if I even want to counter it......

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Were you a history student Sparker?

 

[Sparker]

I was indeed Lace. Not so long ago either. Although I wouldn't even attempt to engage in a debate on Hitler nowadays. I tried my best to avoid anything and everything 20th century!

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Same here mate. Was there an almost cult like following of Hitler at your university? Not suggesting we were fascists like.

 

[Sparker]

There was a band of students that took a little more than a passing interest in 'learning' about Hitler. Couldn't tell you whether it was cult like or not because for my sins I moved more in the Napoleon circles!

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Ah Bonaparte! Now there was a first class loser. Don't ever mention Bonaparte in the same sentence as good man Adolph again please.

In truth I was always drawn to the comical tragedy that was Mussolini.

 

[Sparker]

How did I know that you weren't going to be a Nap fan! My knowledge on Mussolini is sadly limited but 'comical' and 'tragedy' (Especially when thrown together) are certainly words that might spring to mind. It's good to have a fellow history man on here. Are you a 20th century fella then?

 

[Lacedaemonian]

I know the entire history of all things - everything, from the big bang forth to this present second. I am almost omnipresent.

 

[Sparker]

'Almost'? Almost omnipresent? I am disappointed Lace... and you showed such promise!

 

[Lacedaemonian]

Aye I was always such a disappointment to my late father. He said to me on his death bed, "You will never be omnipresent. Never!"

Such hurtful words.

 

[Sparker]

I feel for you Lace, it must have been hard hearing those words... still there's always other ways to prove ones invincibility... you could write a book!