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stream of consciousness is sooo bad for character thoughts.

:P thanks for the suggestions peeps. @Ursa major - I am cheatery cheating, hover cars run on powerful electromagnetic coil drives, if there is a sudden loss of power or an accident their emergency state is a stationary hover so they kind of drift to a halt and slowly sink to the ground over...

hmm... seems a little old fashion for cyberpunk/sci fi. I am probably stretching it with boulevard tbh >.> good word though.

My world has hover cars so streets are now all basically foot traffic. I have a wide open boulevard which enters the urban arcology where my story is set. the boulevard stretches up around 40 floors with hover cars using most of the airspace in it to travel inside the arcology, the bottom of it...

I use this method: I mean its no Shakespeare but seems to work.

@Edward M. Grant Id love to debate the science of these things with you but its probably bordering on derailing the thread. Respectfully I disagree on all points to varying degrees although you are partially correct about all of them, I find myself disagreeing about very technical and...

Well if you have all those problems licked then there's probably no reason not to just nanomachinesplain disease away :p because once you got all that stuff sorted you can do preeety much anything you like. Still good to think what kinds of things might happen if the shiny advanced machinery...

We could build a generation ship now. It would just cost a loooot of money and require international cooperation :P we could have colonized mars in the 70's, the saturn V is capable of achieving mars orbit. I believe there were even plans drawn up at the time for a manned mission attempt but we...

I think if you are worried about what a virus and bacteria from your destination world might do to your emerging colonists. do not worry too much. Our bacteria and viruses evolved alongside us, that is why they can infect us and also why we have symbiotic bacteria within us. it is also why we...

I don't quote thought speech myself, i've seen writers who do though. although I do say so and so thought to make sure the reader knows it is thought speech

Mmmmmmmm my honest opinion. There seems to be a bit of passive voice going on in the later stages of the piece. for example. I think the column should probably either be shaking or not. not seeming like it is. For an action oriented piece... I am not feeling it. if that makes sense. it is...

I stopped watching at season 2 when all the wind blew out of its sails for a season, I couldn't get back into it. Ive read all the comics. I think I prefer watching the infection unfold to watching it slowly grind people into the dirt. The series became all about the people, and I think I feel...

I think the types of interesting characters change as we grow older. When I was a kid I really enjoyed characters who found out they were different from normal people, characters learning how everything worked for the first time. Because it related to my own experiences. Now older and wiser I...

I have a rule I go by which is this. Using said: When the dialog is neutral When it is the first line of some dialog and its neutral When the previous line of dialog does not use the word said. Said replacement: I often use "replied" "responded" to replace said if the person previously speaking...

Generally @tinkerdan probably has one of the clearest explanations. English is a very contextual language so we can give you generic this is how it works statements but there are always exceptions to the rule. and those particular words are not just locational words, they are used in other...

One thing you could do, and I am no fan fiction writer, I prefer to make up my own stuff. But one thing you could do is follow the narrative beyond the scope of the original work. So for example. In home alone Harry and Marv get arrested, we never know what happened to them in jail but... you...

I was picturing Darth Vader :X3:

In first-person focus on the senses. especially where weather and environment are important? i guess?

You will probably get told to post this kind of thing in critiques once you have around 30 posts under your belt. I think you are trying for first person perspective but it is almost written like it is from 3rd person perspective. I think it is too fragmented. I think the amount of accuracy...

Allow? my friend, you try and stop a virus, bacteria or disease getting onto a colony ship? If you had 20 people it would be nearly impossible to stop them bringing some kind of bacteria or virus. thousands? its a guarantee you'll get some even with the strictest controls. Don't forget about...