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stripping out the obvious and keen emotional responses that my flippant and childlike understanding of the world will generate. And indeed substituting pets, with CD's, football strips for the kids, handbags, shoes, cars or pornography (or any other thing we may waste our money on). And baring...

If my day job had a sub title, it would be: I find life as a whole that way. The other day I was wondering why there are starving people in the world and yet millions of pet owners have enough money to feed meat to their animals. Somehow humanity can't spread it's wealth to the poorest people...

Both Epic and Poetic, thoroughly enjoyed it. Agree with Victoria, the introduction sets the piece up beautifully.

Shyrka, The line "throwing ashen dust in its wake," is so perfect in the context of the story and it's moment of use. Very clever.

cuz I like Star Trek init? No really, it is

Victoria, thanks for the kind words. You lift all our hearts with your reviews. Coast - Lovely dark ending. I adore the statesman like language of the news report. Cascade - Enjoyed how poetic it is. Draws you in, left me desperate to read more. Perpetual Man - Perfectly crafted... just perfect!

Dust “What is it Uncle? It’s beautiful.” Wiseman smiled at Ana’s naivety, how to explain armageddon to such a young child? “You know how sunlight filters through your bedroom window, illuminating dust particles in the air?” “Mm hmm,” Ana nodded, sweet, earnest understanding written on her...

I plenty of Spanish, Indian, Chinese and Eastern European 'named' supporting characters. My MC's are mostly American or English names though.

I put my notes at the top of the document while drafting and proofing. Then I try to have note clearing sessions where I work as many of them into the story as possible, without actually drafting.

I've used something like: "Ha!" As a sort of derisive laugh. I feel like that should be allowed as people do 'say' HA

Chuckles It's as if you read my mind ;)

too much mystery without reveal or tie up feels like a cheat to me. Kind of like a TV show I adored once. I watched it thinking this is all so exciting and how does it all interconnect? In the end it appeared that the writers lack an over all story arc and just sort of gave up/petered out. It...

If he has a beautiful daughter with a title she could marry money His wife, daughter, niece could have smuggled some jewels out when he was originally broken. They could have kept them all this time just in case.

That feels like really good advice to me. I re-read something yesterday where I had a doctor saying "I think," which of course A doctor would never say. She now says "I suspect," instead. (Neither difficult words I know, but the principal is the same, she is far more likely to use a word I need...

I preferred the man in silhouette (just to be awkward)

I think an exciting story would work across most genres, the same characters and plot for a murder mystery might easily work on both a space ship and a cruise ship. I'd say it's time to go back to that story :)

It honestly doesn't bother me at all. Since I don't understand a drop of physics I wouldn't mind (or care) if a story broke the rules I don't know or understand. :)

I have a friend who hates every film he watches because the science isn't believable... The thought of that depresses me so much. I couldn't care less if science fiction or just plain fiction fiction isn't realistic. For me it's either entertaining or it's not. I have a big fat zero on...

Well done Juliana a very well deserved win! You story was super creepy :) (in a good way) :) You smashed it! Thanks to Jo and Still learning for their votes, very much appreciated!

Hi Tywin, I enjoyed it, drew me into the action. A couple of things, I felt like it read a bit fragmented, like lots of short sentences, lots of dialogue without much fleshing out descriptions of their surroundings, the people etc. Other thing is "was." I'm trying to go through my stories...