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Xelah sighting omg! :D Opinion Error Still not feeling any connection to the narrator. I get that he's not happy, but unless your target audience is emo kids, you might want to consider putting a bit more of his personality into the opening paragraphs. Is he normally snarky? friendly...

I haven't read anyone else's replies, so my apologies if I sound like a broken record. That all sounds very info dumpy. If you've read any of the dresden files books, you might take a queue from that and explain the magic while there isn't a lot of action going on and the main character is...

Still short on time. Should be able to knock out the rest on the next passing.

I've been watching a bunch of Mystery Science Theater 3000 lately. If you're unfamiliar with the show, it's basically a guy and a couple of robot-puppets mocking really bad movies created by untalented hacks. Said movies often have inane dialog, ridiculous plots, and subplots that feel like...

Same color coding as last time. Error of some sort 100% Xelah-Certified Grade A Opinion Short on time, will have to finish later. Hope this helps.

Thanks for the replies everyone. I still don't know what I'm doing with the name though. @Pyan Nope, learned it as Heron... was rather dumbstruck when I went to fact check on wikipedia and he was listed as "Hero (or Heron) of Alexandria" @ParanoidMarvin The Greekness was only supposed to...

I must vote Alchemist. The reindeer tossing Santa out made me lol.

It's points like this that make me sad that I have to kill the professor before I can fully flesh him out in the story. So much is going to have to be explained by other characters. =/

The sacrifice has to fit the situation, it can't just be the author murdering characters.

@Everyone Abigail didn't design the machine, only assisted in the construction. @UM That does sound a little better. @Glitch Hrmm... good idea. @TJ to which Professor Jefferson would reply with a grin if he were standing there "You're right, but it's a steam-apparatus that allows us to go up...

If you guys don't mind a short read, here's how I introduce the name of the ship. I took into account people not knowing what an astrolabe is and to point out that it's the person, not the bird. Does it work? _____________________________________________ “There's something I've been...

It's actually something I've had in mind for some time. I remember first getting the idea years ago after reading this: Airline sacrifices goats to appease sky god | Reuters I don't mean to take jabs at anyone's faith, but I can't help but wonder what the mechanics thought the goats would...

Re: December Writing Challenge Going to try this again Cultists on Attica Station Grunting with exertion, chief Paddington fastened the final bolt, completing life support system repairs. “Don't look now,” Denning called from below. “What?” Paddington asked, immediately looking...

Right, so in my steampunk WIP the main characters take off into the wild blue yonder with their airship instead of surrendering it to the Union (or burning it) after the Confederacy surrenders in the American Civil War. I always get hung up on names and I'm not sure if the current name of the...

Seems to be a hot topic here, vampires and werewolves and all. I'm curious as to how many fantasy writers here are working on a project that has either vampires or werecreatures of some sort. They don't have to be the main character, just that they're in the work.

I'm willing to accept that this might be helpful to others, but I stand by the booga booga booga.

That reminds me! I might not have an infinite number of monkeys with infinite typewriters, but I've got the next best thing. Maybe this will help you too. Round up a half dozen illegal immigrant children and keep them in your attic, then give them typewriters. They're pretty low...

Now that this is pretty much over and I can't dash anyone's hopes with disparaging words, I've got to say that I fail to see the point in nanowrimo. It's an exercise in futility and wastes a month of writing time. I'd rather write 15k-30k words a month and do it properly than exhaust myself on...

No, you're right, Bevors are worn over the armor. Although generally, unless I'm told bevor, when I see neckpiece I assume gorget. It tends to be the more commonly piece of armor depicted in fiction. As for flanking vs pincer, what is happening? Is the attack more like this? Pincer...

Did I say "gah" ? What I meant to say was: "forgive me father, for I have sinned." Looks like I'm going to have to do this in intervals.