Sorry, I've only just written this today but I'd just like to know if it's too much, too soon. It (the scene) comes straight after what I posted up in crits the other day, so it's still in the very beginning, chapter one.
Probably don't read it if you're easily offended. Also, I'm censoring the swears - they're not censored in the doc.
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The DJ played the music loud and its heavy beats pulsed through her chest, making her feel a little sick. Strobe lights flashed, people jumped up and down, and the sticky floor bounced beneath her feet. She squeezed past a group of youngsters, teens – probably not old enough to be there, their hot bodies smelling of sweat and alcohol, and made her way across the crowded dance floor to the table where the others sat. She put the drinks on the table and took a seat next to Esme.
"You all right?" Esme asked, leaning over. She wore false eyelashes, making her elfin face appear doll-like, and a low-cut top to show off her ample assets. She smelled like peaches.
Allery pulled her gaze up. "Mm? Yeah. You?"
Esme grinned. "See anything you like?"
Allery couldn't help glancing at Nick, though he couldn't possibly hear them and was deep in conversation with Driscoll anyway, before clearing her throat and looking out at the dancers. "Tall blonde," she said, "dancing with the sweaty guy."
"I think that's a man, Al."
She rolled her eyes. "No, there."
Esme followed her gaze. "Oh yeah. Not bad."
"Not bad?" Allery gazed at the woman, her curled blonde hair bounced around her shoulders as she danced and her dress was tight and short, showing off ridiculously long legs. "I'm going to talk to her," she said, getting up.
"She looks like a slut," Esme commented.
"Good!" She gave her friend a wink, and squeezed back onto the dance floor, pushing through the crowd to reach her target. The woman had stopped dancing by the time she got to her, and was leaning against the bar, laughing at some joke with her sweaty friend.
Allery rested her forearms on the bar, pretending to wait for service, and gave it a moment before saying, "I like your dress."
The woman looked at her. "What?" she asked loudly.
"Your dress," Allery replied. "I like it. It's very tight."
"Are you taking the p*ss?" Then to her friend, "Is she taking the p*ss?"
Allery smiled and shook her head. "I'm not taking the p*ss. I'm Allery, by the way."
"Oh." The woman looked suspicious for just a moment longer before her frown lifted and she smiled. "I'm Caitlin. This is my cousin, Mark."
"Mark, I'm going to pinch your dance partner," Allery said, taking Caitlin's hands. "Dance with me?" She pulled her onto the dance floor before she could protest, smiling at Caitlin's confused laugh.
They danced, Caitlin's hands above her head, eyes closed. Heat radiated off the bodies around them. Allery took the opportunity to put an arm around Caitlin's waist and pull her closer. The other woman's eyes opened and her arms descended around Allery's neck.
"Are you gay?" she asked.
"Little bit," Allery replied, grinning at the drunken eyes-half-closed expression on Caitlin's face. "You don't have to dance with me if it makes you uncomfortable."
Caitlin had come very close to her, leaning in so she could hear. Allery breathed in the smell of her, her blonde hair tickling her face.
"Always wondered what it'd be like to kiss a woman," Caitlin said, moving back.
"Want to find out?"
For a reply Caitlin's lips met her own, smooth and warm, and when she opened her mouth, Allery tasted vodka and orange on her tongue. Love straight girls, she thought. The kiss ended as the next track started to play. Allery lifted a hand to push Caitlin's hair from her face and froze.
Behind Caitlin, standing among the dancers, stood a warden. Though he looked like a teenage boy, he was unmistakable for what he was with his soulless black orbs for eyes and the unnatural stillness with which he held himself. Nobody else seemed to notice him. Allery looked back through the crowd for her friends but Driscoll sat alone at the table.
"Warden," she mouthed to him and it took only the blink of her eyes for him to disappear.
She turned back, took hold of Caitlin's arm to lead her away but a blade burst from the girl's chest, blood red. Caitlin's brow knitted in confusion and a strangled noise passed her lips, her fingers clutched at Allery's shoulder. She looked down at the blade and then into Allery's eyes, her own eyes red and teary, full of fear.
The music seemed to mute and the blood pounding in Allery's head was louder, she opened her mouth to say… to say what? The warden pulled the blade back and Caitlin crumpled. People screamed then and Allery's ears popped.
"No," she breathed, holding Caitlin as she lay dying. She looked up at the warden, heard from somewhere the shout of Caitlin's cousin, felt him shove her aside, and she fell back onto her elbows, staring at Caitlin.
"Al!"
She came to when someone grabbed her arms and pulled her to her feet, and she clutched Nick's arm and backed up with him as the warden paced towards them.
"Where's Esme?" she cried, as people scattered before the knife-wielding lunatic, bumping into one another.
A dark shape crashed into the warden, knocking him off his feet and pinning him to the dance floor, snarling over him, fur bristling.
"Oh sh*t, Nick!" She started pushing people then, shoving them towards the exit, yelling, "Go! Go!"
Nick did the same and she could hear him crying, "It's all right, it's just a dog!"
A dog! Inside she was laughing hysterically. A f*cking dog!
Another warden appeared in front of her, a girl this time, probably about ten years old. Clubbers skirted around her, spilling out of the fire escape into the night. The girl raised her arm; she had a gun in her hand and it was pointed at Nick.
Allery dived across him as the gun fired, the bullet punched into her back and she fell into his arms. As he lowered her to the floor, she saw the wolf leap over them. The darkness closed in on her.
Probably don't read it if you're easily offended. Also, I'm censoring the swears - they're not censored in the doc.
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The DJ played the music loud and its heavy beats pulsed through her chest, making her feel a little sick. Strobe lights flashed, people jumped up and down, and the sticky floor bounced beneath her feet. She squeezed past a group of youngsters, teens – probably not old enough to be there, their hot bodies smelling of sweat and alcohol, and made her way across the crowded dance floor to the table where the others sat. She put the drinks on the table and took a seat next to Esme.
"You all right?" Esme asked, leaning over. She wore false eyelashes, making her elfin face appear doll-like, and a low-cut top to show off her ample assets. She smelled like peaches.
Allery pulled her gaze up. "Mm? Yeah. You?"
Esme grinned. "See anything you like?"
Allery couldn't help glancing at Nick, though he couldn't possibly hear them and was deep in conversation with Driscoll anyway, before clearing her throat and looking out at the dancers. "Tall blonde," she said, "dancing with the sweaty guy."
"I think that's a man, Al."
She rolled her eyes. "No, there."
Esme followed her gaze. "Oh yeah. Not bad."
"Not bad?" Allery gazed at the woman, her curled blonde hair bounced around her shoulders as she danced and her dress was tight and short, showing off ridiculously long legs. "I'm going to talk to her," she said, getting up.
"She looks like a slut," Esme commented.
"Good!" She gave her friend a wink, and squeezed back onto the dance floor, pushing through the crowd to reach her target. The woman had stopped dancing by the time she got to her, and was leaning against the bar, laughing at some joke with her sweaty friend.
Allery rested her forearms on the bar, pretending to wait for service, and gave it a moment before saying, "I like your dress."
The woman looked at her. "What?" she asked loudly.
"Your dress," Allery replied. "I like it. It's very tight."
"Are you taking the p*ss?" Then to her friend, "Is she taking the p*ss?"
Allery smiled and shook her head. "I'm not taking the p*ss. I'm Allery, by the way."
"Oh." The woman looked suspicious for just a moment longer before her frown lifted and she smiled. "I'm Caitlin. This is my cousin, Mark."
"Mark, I'm going to pinch your dance partner," Allery said, taking Caitlin's hands. "Dance with me?" She pulled her onto the dance floor before she could protest, smiling at Caitlin's confused laugh.
They danced, Caitlin's hands above her head, eyes closed. Heat radiated off the bodies around them. Allery took the opportunity to put an arm around Caitlin's waist and pull her closer. The other woman's eyes opened and her arms descended around Allery's neck.
"Are you gay?" she asked.
"Little bit," Allery replied, grinning at the drunken eyes-half-closed expression on Caitlin's face. "You don't have to dance with me if it makes you uncomfortable."
Caitlin had come very close to her, leaning in so she could hear. Allery breathed in the smell of her, her blonde hair tickling her face.
"Always wondered what it'd be like to kiss a woman," Caitlin said, moving back.
"Want to find out?"
For a reply Caitlin's lips met her own, smooth and warm, and when she opened her mouth, Allery tasted vodka and orange on her tongue. Love straight girls, she thought. The kiss ended as the next track started to play. Allery lifted a hand to push Caitlin's hair from her face and froze.
Behind Caitlin, standing among the dancers, stood a warden. Though he looked like a teenage boy, he was unmistakable for what he was with his soulless black orbs for eyes and the unnatural stillness with which he held himself. Nobody else seemed to notice him. Allery looked back through the crowd for her friends but Driscoll sat alone at the table.
"Warden," she mouthed to him and it took only the blink of her eyes for him to disappear.
She turned back, took hold of Caitlin's arm to lead her away but a blade burst from the girl's chest, blood red. Caitlin's brow knitted in confusion and a strangled noise passed her lips, her fingers clutched at Allery's shoulder. She looked down at the blade and then into Allery's eyes, her own eyes red and teary, full of fear.
The music seemed to mute and the blood pounding in Allery's head was louder, she opened her mouth to say… to say what? The warden pulled the blade back and Caitlin crumpled. People screamed then and Allery's ears popped.
"No," she breathed, holding Caitlin as she lay dying. She looked up at the warden, heard from somewhere the shout of Caitlin's cousin, felt him shove her aside, and she fell back onto her elbows, staring at Caitlin.
"Al!"
She came to when someone grabbed her arms and pulled her to her feet, and she clutched Nick's arm and backed up with him as the warden paced towards them.
"Where's Esme?" she cried, as people scattered before the knife-wielding lunatic, bumping into one another.
A dark shape crashed into the warden, knocking him off his feet and pinning him to the dance floor, snarling over him, fur bristling.
"Oh sh*t, Nick!" She started pushing people then, shoving them towards the exit, yelling, "Go! Go!"
Nick did the same and she could hear him crying, "It's all right, it's just a dog!"
A dog! Inside she was laughing hysterically. A f*cking dog!
Another warden appeared in front of her, a girl this time, probably about ten years old. Clubbers skirted around her, spilling out of the fire escape into the night. The girl raised her arm; she had a gun in her hand and it was pointed at Nick.
Allery dived across him as the gun fired, the bullet punched into her back and she fell into his arms. As he lowered her to the floor, she saw the wolf leap over them. The darkness closed in on her.