anthorn
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first half of chapter one. Basically just character introductions at this time. First draft written in one sitting.
Probably filled with mistakes.
(most likely)
Rain, rain, and more rain.
It was a great start to the holidays, but then this was England, so he couldn’t be too mad. What he was mad about was the fact he was spending it with his family in some crappy resort. Fun Land they called it, and by the leaflet he’d seen he knew it to be a place best suited to the old and the morons believing McDonalds qualified as a restaurant.
Fun Land stood in some remote part of the countryside with plastic palm trees decorating the roadside and sand pits imitating a beach by the pool. As the coach lumbered up the winding road Greg Tanner poked his head into the isle of the bus to get a better look at the place. It was hideous, at least by his standards, and the building seemed as though it was trying to look like a hotel but not quite succeeding. His impressions didn’t improve as they pulled into the driveway, and he smirked at the security guard standing by the door. As if anyone would steal from this place.
“Welcome to Paradise,” said the man not at all sarcastically.
Inside the lobby the manager of the resort, a short woman with blue eyes and blond hair, stopped them and grinned. “Welcome to Fun Land, the premier family holiday destination in the northeast of England. I hope you enjoy your stay, and please if you have any queries, do ask. Oh, and before you go, please let me tell you about our entertainment. For the old folks we have world-renowned crooner, Sammy Devlin and he is here for one week only. For the younger generation we have X-Factor finalist David Romero. Any questions?”
“Yeah I have one. How do we get the hell out of here,” said Greg, or he would have done had his father’s meaty hand not clamped down on his shoulder at that point. Glumly he followed the resort staff leading them to their rooms.
“Are you just going to lie there all day?” asked his dad.
“Yep, and to your next question I answer yep again.”
“You can’t stay here all day, love,” said his mother, turning away to count how many clothes hangers there were in the wardrobe. “David Romero is singing tonight, you love him don’t you?”
Greg rolled his eyes, then continued to stare at the cream coloured roof. “No, I like proper music; good music.”
“Well I like him,” said dad.
“My point exactly. I didn’t even want to come here anyways!”
The dynamic of the bed shifted slightly as his dad sat beside him. “I know son, but times are hard these days. I would’ve liked to have gone to Spain again too. Life isn’t fair Greg and for that I am sorry. Now, don’t leave this room until me and your mother gets back, we are going to explore.”
“Fine.”
Hours passed, or maybe just one hour, as he was never that good at telling time. Greg sat up, reaching for the television remote and turning it to channel one. “Welcome to BBC news,” said the newswoman, shifting her papers nervously. “Our headlines are; now with the manager of Manchester United stepping down, England’s chances in the world cup are thrown into doubt; and two months on; the world after the vaccine.”
He switched it off, yawned, stood, and stretched his limbs out. He pulled the curtains back and gazed on an empty pool before a noise from outside drew his attention. Poking his head out the door he looked left and right. As he turned his head a door swung open and a woman with ebony black skin stormed out of the room. “f*ck off you ****!” she said loudly. “I’m your bodyguard not your whore!”
He waited until she had passed before he whistled. The woman turned, her face a block of stone. “Some men are idiots aren’t they?” he said, trying his luck. “Don’t know how to treat a lady.”
“And you do?” she replied, walking slowly toward him.
“I have been known to treat a lady right, got no complaints.”
“Tell me more,” she said, coming even closer, until she was close enough that he could smell her perfume.
“Well, you got to treat them nicely, don’t ya. You have to treat them like a…a…Like a fine wine!”
She leaned in close and now her breasts were inches from his face, her lips brushing his ear. “Even in your wildest dreams you could not have a girl like me,” she said, scornfully. “f*ck off and go play in the sandbox kid.”
And like that she was gone, sauntering off down the hall and vanishing around the corner. Red faced, Greg slammed the door shut and tried not to cry.
This was the worst holiday ever.
She had probably been too mean with the kid but she was too angry to care. Making her way to the bar, she quickly ordered a vodka and tonic and sat at the far corner away from everyone. Holidays were the worst kind of days, especially when she was forced to accompany her clients to areas filled with tourists. Abeke tried to hide the grimace across her face but failed as she watched a man swaying back and forth around the bar. He was dressed in garish jewellery and white shorts and skintight top to show his muscles.
“Hey I know you,” called a slightly slurred voice from behind her.
She ignored him.
“Hey! I said I know you. You’re Abeke aren’t ya? Abeke the killer.”
Now she did turn her head. The man peering over the booth had a poorly kept Mohawk and a goatee that was just as scraggly. “Wrong Abeke, but then I hear we all look the same to you white folk.”
“Nah, I’m right. You’re the Abeke alright.”
“If I tell you yes will you leave me be?”
“I’ll take that as a yes then shall I? You can call me Michael. Michael Tarver.”
“I shall call you dickhead.”
There came a pause, then, he said. “You’re not a friendly person are you? Fine, I am sorry for being sociable.”
Abeke sighed. “I’m sorry. I am just having one of those days, Michael Tarver.”
“Oh I understand that,” he said sympathetically as he clambered over to sit beside her. “These days you’re lucky to have a good day; but then they invented alcohol for that.”
“Hmm.”
“So are you her?” he asked.
She looked down at her drink. “Yes I am her.”
He slapped her on the back, grinning. “Then why so sad? You killed a paedophile and in this country you’d have the Daily Mail calling you a hero, y’know, if you weren’t black, n’all.”
She took a deep breath, for even after all these years it was still hard to talk about. “Because,” she began. “That man was my father.”
Probably filled with mistakes.
(most likely)
Rain, rain, and more rain.
It was a great start to the holidays, but then this was England, so he couldn’t be too mad. What he was mad about was the fact he was spending it with his family in some crappy resort. Fun Land they called it, and by the leaflet he’d seen he knew it to be a place best suited to the old and the morons believing McDonalds qualified as a restaurant.
Fun Land stood in some remote part of the countryside with plastic palm trees decorating the roadside and sand pits imitating a beach by the pool. As the coach lumbered up the winding road Greg Tanner poked his head into the isle of the bus to get a better look at the place. It was hideous, at least by his standards, and the building seemed as though it was trying to look like a hotel but not quite succeeding. His impressions didn’t improve as they pulled into the driveway, and he smirked at the security guard standing by the door. As if anyone would steal from this place.
“Welcome to Paradise,” said the man not at all sarcastically.
Inside the lobby the manager of the resort, a short woman with blue eyes and blond hair, stopped them and grinned. “Welcome to Fun Land, the premier family holiday destination in the northeast of England. I hope you enjoy your stay, and please if you have any queries, do ask. Oh, and before you go, please let me tell you about our entertainment. For the old folks we have world-renowned crooner, Sammy Devlin and he is here for one week only. For the younger generation we have X-Factor finalist David Romero. Any questions?”
“Yeah I have one. How do we get the hell out of here,” said Greg, or he would have done had his father’s meaty hand not clamped down on his shoulder at that point. Glumly he followed the resort staff leading them to their rooms.
#
“Yep, and to your next question I answer yep again.”
“You can’t stay here all day, love,” said his mother, turning away to count how many clothes hangers there were in the wardrobe. “David Romero is singing tonight, you love him don’t you?”
Greg rolled his eyes, then continued to stare at the cream coloured roof. “No, I like proper music; good music.”
“Well I like him,” said dad.
“My point exactly. I didn’t even want to come here anyways!”
The dynamic of the bed shifted slightly as his dad sat beside him. “I know son, but times are hard these days. I would’ve liked to have gone to Spain again too. Life isn’t fair Greg and for that I am sorry. Now, don’t leave this room until me and your mother gets back, we are going to explore.”
“Fine.”
Hours passed, or maybe just one hour, as he was never that good at telling time. Greg sat up, reaching for the television remote and turning it to channel one. “Welcome to BBC news,” said the newswoman, shifting her papers nervously. “Our headlines are; now with the manager of Manchester United stepping down, England’s chances in the world cup are thrown into doubt; and two months on; the world after the vaccine.”
He switched it off, yawned, stood, and stretched his limbs out. He pulled the curtains back and gazed on an empty pool before a noise from outside drew his attention. Poking his head out the door he looked left and right. As he turned his head a door swung open and a woman with ebony black skin stormed out of the room. “f*ck off you ****!” she said loudly. “I’m your bodyguard not your whore!”
He waited until she had passed before he whistled. The woman turned, her face a block of stone. “Some men are idiots aren’t they?” he said, trying his luck. “Don’t know how to treat a lady.”
“And you do?” she replied, walking slowly toward him.
“I have been known to treat a lady right, got no complaints.”
“Tell me more,” she said, coming even closer, until she was close enough that he could smell her perfume.
“Well, you got to treat them nicely, don’t ya. You have to treat them like a…a…Like a fine wine!”
She leaned in close and now her breasts were inches from his face, her lips brushing his ear. “Even in your wildest dreams you could not have a girl like me,” she said, scornfully. “f*ck off and go play in the sandbox kid.”
And like that she was gone, sauntering off down the hall and vanishing around the corner. Red faced, Greg slammed the door shut and tried not to cry.
This was the worst holiday ever.
#
“Hey I know you,” called a slightly slurred voice from behind her.
She ignored him.
“Hey! I said I know you. You’re Abeke aren’t ya? Abeke the killer.”
Now she did turn her head. The man peering over the booth had a poorly kept Mohawk and a goatee that was just as scraggly. “Wrong Abeke, but then I hear we all look the same to you white folk.”
“Nah, I’m right. You’re the Abeke alright.”
“If I tell you yes will you leave me be?”
“I’ll take that as a yes then shall I? You can call me Michael. Michael Tarver.”
“I shall call you dickhead.”
There came a pause, then, he said. “You’re not a friendly person are you? Fine, I am sorry for being sociable.”
Abeke sighed. “I’m sorry. I am just having one of those days, Michael Tarver.”
“Oh I understand that,” he said sympathetically as he clambered over to sit beside her. “These days you’re lucky to have a good day; but then they invented alcohol for that.”
“Hmm.”
“So are you her?” he asked.
She looked down at her drink. “Yes I am her.”
He slapped her on the back, grinning. “Then why so sad? You killed a paedophile and in this country you’d have the Daily Mail calling you a hero, y’know, if you weren’t black, n’all.”
She took a deep breath, for even after all these years it was still hard to talk about. “Because,” she began. “That man was my father.”