Have just had some comments back from a Brit Awards assessor and mostly they are positive. She had an issue with the synopsis, but the chapters themselves were fine. It's the negative I need your opinions on lol part of me says I can't bloody change it because it will totally muck up my world. The Negative is: However, stylistically it can be confusing. Why would another world talk about 'gits' and have boys who wear jeans? Although this may be an intentional device to connect readers to your world, this is not standard in the fantasy genre and may cause agents / publishers concern. My not very considered I just got this back response: It isn't an intentional device to connect readers to my world. It is my world, it's set in a contempoary time frame to our own (with some constraints that make it different like in a world when people can turn into birds - developing aeroplanes took longer) and is not an historical-like world. When my MCs dad, the king, is dressed in his uniform, my MC states he looks like something out of a history book. The world also has a character who left Earth in 2010 along with a religious band of Brethren and arrived on the planet (it's a Noah type story he's commanded to build an 'ark' which links to another story later where one of my character's becomes the 'god' that commanded him). The man spoke English so my planet probably speaks a version of English. Is it just confusing to her because when it said high-fantasy she was expecting a medieval world? (even though the synopsis stated it was a time similar to our own) None of my previous fantasy addicted readers of the book have found it confusing, or can I really not write a fantasy set in another 'modern' world ? I've put the first two pages up in critiques (wary about adding any more).