Shadowmancer
Pravus Imperator
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I was wondering if anyone could give me some advice and analyze this first bit of the first chapter of the novel I'm trying to write? If the spelling of some words looks a bit off, chances are it's the Canadian spelling
Cheers
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The commute to work was less than savoury for Joshua Evermann. The shuttle stations in Okinawa, Japan had been unusually cramped for a Tuesday morning. The shuttles came every fifteen minutes, but the amount of human traffic was almost too much to bear. The shuttles were scheduled this way so that accidents would be avoided.
Each shuttle, once filled to capacity, would be shot down the transparent tunnels and propelled by gravitational bursts along the shuttles substratum. The tunnels ran throughout the city and above ground. They were raised thirty feet above the streets by strong, light, and aesthetically pleasing support beams. On any given day, one could walk down the streets and see the shuttles be shot down the tunnels. If you weren't looking for it then you would never know because the gravitational bursts expelled no sound.
These wonderful features of the shuttles were of little comfort to Joshua while he had waited for over an hour to get on the shuttle and take the trip to Global Robotics. When he finally arrived, he was forty five minutes late and extremely agitated that he was unable to stop for a coffee before trying to make it to work on time. He was mildly wet when he finally entered the front foyer of Global Robotics. It was raining outside and in his haste to make it to the shuttle station; Joshua had forgotten to grab an umbrella. This made the walk from the shuttle station very unpleasant.
Walking up to the security check-point, Joshua prepared himself by reaching into his wet business jacket for his encrypted identity slip. Once past that point, Joshua would also have to pass a retinal and DNA scan to finally proceed to his lab.
Security was very strict and cautious with their measures. It was necessary though in order to keep their secrets intact. They could hardly afford to have a competitor stealing their research and gaining an advantage on the market. There was a reason that Global Robotics was the largest supplier of robots in the Galactic Arm.
After passing the security gauntlet, Joshua made his way to the Positronic Lab. The doors to the lab slid open after a swipe of his identity slip. He walked in to find his colleagues staring at him.
"What are you looking at?" Joshua asked. He was directing his question at his friend and co-worker Takahashi Shinji.
"What do you think I'm looking at?" Takahashi Replied. "I'm looking at someone who's almost an hour late and an integral part of this team. We need to be more focused, this is big! I'm also looking at a friend who looks like a bag of smashed apples," he added jest fully.
"So glad I could amuse you this morning Tak. If I had known I was the entertainment, I would have pulled out the clown costume," Joshua said with a hint of sarcasm. After hanging up his wet jacket in exchange for a white lab coat, Joshua turned to Takahashi. "Sorry Tak. I just had a brutal morning and I know that's no excuse, I'm just sorry I took it out on you. Ok man?"
"No problem. We just got a lot of work to do and I guess I went overboard myself. Let's just get the ball rolling. Are you good to go Joshua?" Takahashi asked as he passed Joshua a coffee he had been keeping at his work station for his tardy friend.
Joshua took the coffee with a smile and sat down at his work station, content with the knowledge that he now had the sweet nectar that would sustain him for the rest of the morning. After drinking almost half the cup, he put it down and got to work on the coded clusters that were to be embedded into each robot's positronic matrix.
The morning had been slow going, even with the caffeine in his system. The only break that Joshua had taken was his one hour lunch. The cafeteria's veal sandwiches were amazing and a close second to the coffee as highlights of the day.
Embedding clusters of code into a positronic matrix was very slow and tedious. If the code was even just slightly out of its designated area, everything would have to be recalibrated and the matrix was scrapped. Not only was it hours of work lost, but millions of credits too.
A few hours had passed since his lunch break and Joshua stumbled upon an anomaly buried within one of the clusters.
Cheers
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The commute to work was less than savoury for Joshua Evermann. The shuttle stations in Okinawa, Japan had been unusually cramped for a Tuesday morning. The shuttles came every fifteen minutes, but the amount of human traffic was almost too much to bear. The shuttles were scheduled this way so that accidents would be avoided.
Each shuttle, once filled to capacity, would be shot down the transparent tunnels and propelled by gravitational bursts along the shuttles substratum. The tunnels ran throughout the city and above ground. They were raised thirty feet above the streets by strong, light, and aesthetically pleasing support beams. On any given day, one could walk down the streets and see the shuttles be shot down the tunnels. If you weren't looking for it then you would never know because the gravitational bursts expelled no sound.
These wonderful features of the shuttles were of little comfort to Joshua while he had waited for over an hour to get on the shuttle and take the trip to Global Robotics. When he finally arrived, he was forty five minutes late and extremely agitated that he was unable to stop for a coffee before trying to make it to work on time. He was mildly wet when he finally entered the front foyer of Global Robotics. It was raining outside and in his haste to make it to the shuttle station; Joshua had forgotten to grab an umbrella. This made the walk from the shuttle station very unpleasant.
Walking up to the security check-point, Joshua prepared himself by reaching into his wet business jacket for his encrypted identity slip. Once past that point, Joshua would also have to pass a retinal and DNA scan to finally proceed to his lab.
Security was very strict and cautious with their measures. It was necessary though in order to keep their secrets intact. They could hardly afford to have a competitor stealing their research and gaining an advantage on the market. There was a reason that Global Robotics was the largest supplier of robots in the Galactic Arm.
After passing the security gauntlet, Joshua made his way to the Positronic Lab. The doors to the lab slid open after a swipe of his identity slip. He walked in to find his colleagues staring at him.
"What are you looking at?" Joshua asked. He was directing his question at his friend and co-worker Takahashi Shinji.
"What do you think I'm looking at?" Takahashi Replied. "I'm looking at someone who's almost an hour late and an integral part of this team. We need to be more focused, this is big! I'm also looking at a friend who looks like a bag of smashed apples," he added jest fully.
"So glad I could amuse you this morning Tak. If I had known I was the entertainment, I would have pulled out the clown costume," Joshua said with a hint of sarcasm. After hanging up his wet jacket in exchange for a white lab coat, Joshua turned to Takahashi. "Sorry Tak. I just had a brutal morning and I know that's no excuse, I'm just sorry I took it out on you. Ok man?"
"No problem. We just got a lot of work to do and I guess I went overboard myself. Let's just get the ball rolling. Are you good to go Joshua?" Takahashi asked as he passed Joshua a coffee he had been keeping at his work station for his tardy friend.
Joshua took the coffee with a smile and sat down at his work station, content with the knowledge that he now had the sweet nectar that would sustain him for the rest of the morning. After drinking almost half the cup, he put it down and got to work on the coded clusters that were to be embedded into each robot's positronic matrix.
The morning had been slow going, even with the caffeine in his system. The only break that Joshua had taken was his one hour lunch. The cafeteria's veal sandwiches were amazing and a close second to the coffee as highlights of the day.
Embedding clusters of code into a positronic matrix was very slow and tedious. If the code was even just slightly out of its designated area, everything would have to be recalibrated and the matrix was scrapped. Not only was it hours of work lost, but millions of credits too.
A few hours had passed since his lunch break and Joshua stumbled upon an anomaly buried within one of the clusters.