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Thank you everyone for your wonderful suggestions, especially TheEndIsNigh, I do believe I will use the tether/trap idea :) And to The Judge for editing my post, I thank you also. I will re-read the new rules :)

Until Death Do Us Part It was a perfectly good meal, she told herself. He liked steak. But nothing was ever perfect enough. Nothing would ever surmount his abominable appetite for her anguish. His perverse need for her distress. His pleasure in her screams. She smiled. There would be no...

Why thank you so much, Crispen!! And yes, yes it does make me feel a bit proud heh heh. I will check that link now! :)

Opinions of pace and prose gratefully accepted. And if Crispen is still a divil with a red pen... do feel free! Prologue Snuffling in the undergrowth, the wily she-wolf found the scent of her prey. It thought it could get away from her. How wrong it was. She’d been tracking it for...

Yup it was the witch 'Marianne' from an Anita Blake novel I was thinking about :-D

No it's not Claudine...it's wrecking my head, is what it is! lol I think it may be a LKH book I'm thinking of. I'll have to look it up.

I love True Blood. And my fiance, who is desperately hard to please loves it too. Actually he's sort of HOOKED on it hahaha. We have seasons 1 and 2 on disk, and waiting with baited breath for season 3 to come out!! As for the characters... Sookie and Sam are mostly like I always imagined...

About time I commented on my own topic lol Endings...hmmm...it's a difficult one to call, isn't it? It depends on a lot of things. How well I've connected with the main character, whether he/she needs putting out of their misery, for lack of a better phrase, and realism. As many others...

The first book I ever read without being hounded into it by the teachers in school. I was around nine, and I've been such a book worm ever since. Under the Hawthorn Tree. Anyone read it?

Surely she doesn't just take her toilette and go straight back out....she must wash her hands, apply some lotion, perhaps? This would give him time to get up there...especially if he's been lying in wait so he'd know exactly when she used it...hey, you're a writer, make it work! lol

So...do you like a book to have a final ending once the series or trilogy or whatever is over? Do you like the good guy to win, good triumphing over evil? Or... Do you sometimes like the bad guy to escape...to swear revenge, even though you know that no more books will be written... does...

Ok...I took a few moments to think and...there are no attendants when she uses her toilette...set in that era, her toilette would effectively be a hole in the ground, which leads to a sewer from a steep drop. But, I'm sure you could come up with a device that helps you climb the sewer (very...

Isn't she allowed male company for rituals? Could he insinuate himself into the church to that degree in such a short time? Perhaps he murders a priest nobody has yet met and takes his place? There has to be some way around this...

How about all three? I've been thinking... What if she woke up at home (with a blank spot where her memory of what happened should be), and something belonging to the man in her possession, only to find out through the grapevine the next day of the man's murder. I can see her waiting...

All brilliant suggestions. Thank you guys. I believe I will take Crispen's advice and explore those five years of existing, if not living, in these awful slums. Even if I don't write it all down, I'll have it in my head; it's a vault! Maybe she'll just go flip-flop-stone-cold-mad and kill...

Okay guys, let me give you a bit of backround on my story. Imagine a large, square maze. This is the city. There are four layers - from the slums just inside the first walls, to the royal palace nestled in the very heart of it. The city is safe, if not exactly thriving. Outside the city...

Thank you very much for your comments, I can definitely see where you're coming from and I will go back over it and tweak it some. The first entry is the slum girl's father, I thought I was making that clear, but I guess things are just so clear in my mind when I'm writing that I forget...

Thanks for the critiques, Manarion and Crispen...and you're right, I have been out of the loop for a long time. I'm totally blaming my fiancé for that, as the past few years have been spent romancing, planning a wedding and having a baby girl who is now 5 months old and not so demanding so...

Times are hard, he told himself. That’s why he did what he did. He had to. The only other choice was moving outside the city walls. Out in the open. Where they could get you. No, he said to himself, this was the only way. An image of his daughter’s shining face flashed before his closed...

Wow, thank you so much for your encouragement! I'll post another section as soon as I can, Boneman.